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napowrimo #2

April 2, 2010

Here is my second poem for NaPoWriMo.

I used the prompt from Poetic Asides: “write a water poem.”

..DRAFT /

REMOVED BY THE AUTHOR FOR REVISION.

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18 Comments
  1. April 2, 2010 5:28 pm

    The pond I swam
    thousands of times as a child still sends
    love letters though I have stopped replying.

    Intriguing idea, personification and comparisons!

    My new lover will never reveal
    his penmanship to me

  2. April 2, 2010 6:07 pm

    Carolee,
    Who could forget those summers? Wonderfully done!
    Pamela

  3. April 2, 2010 6:18 pm

    So beautiful! I still receive love letters from the water I swam in as a child.

  4. April 2, 2010 6:51 pm

    caroleeeeeeee… thaz so very, very beautiful… i am remember of the long summers by the beach… i am in love with the ocean and yr poem brings the water even closer than i could possibly imagine…. and ohhh btw.. have always enjoyed RWP and appreciate all the hard work y’all have put into it… especially so the new site!!! monster moves

    • April 2, 2010 9:43 pm

      thank you! i will miss RWP. it’s time for me to work on something new. some are just discovering it, but it’s been 3 years for me. i’m finally ready. 🙂

  5. April 2, 2010 8:16 pm

    water is wonderful…..we have a creek running through our land….heading towards the Columbia ….thanks for this Carolee

  6. April 2, 2010 8:58 pm

    Beautiful Carolee – the motif of love to plumb the depths of water…

    • April 3, 2010 7:03 pm

      uma, i really am in love with water. 🙂

      this didn’t make it in the poem, but i was always one of those fish-children. more comfortable in the water than out. i lived in it all summer. it was my own world.

      i tried to comment on your site and i hoped it worked! seemed like there was a glitch, but i’ll try again. thanks for reading here.

  7. April 2, 2010 9:12 pm

    missin you, man! you will not believe (or maybe you will. you probably will) that i just, JUST wrote my poem for today and guess what it’s about? water. and summer. and memories. parallel lives!

    love the pond sending love letters!

    • April 2, 2010 9:45 pm

      i can’t take credit for the water. it came from poetic asides. off to see your post, though. who doesn’t love summer memories? i love summer memories. 🙂

  8. April 2, 2010 9:14 pm

    A joy to share a memory with someone like that. Thank you for sharing this one.

  9. April 2, 2010 9:22 pm

    Wow. This really shows the power of a simple, clear idea taken to its logical conclusion. I love this kind of poem.

    • April 2, 2010 9:50 pm

      the real story of benveniste is quite interesting.* i’d intended on writing more about that, but when i started to write the love letter line came pretty quickly and then all bets were off!

      *the editor at the journal that published his article set out to re-run benveniste’s experiments. the research team included the editor, a magician/paranormal researcher and a physicist/debunker. i think that group would be more fun at the bar than the lab.

  10. April 2, 2010 11:11 pm

    Whoa — that’s a hott poem. Very nice.

  11. April 2, 2010 11:12 pm

    That was me. 😉

    • April 3, 2010 6:57 pm

      i recognize the photo as you, my dear. thanks for stopping by!

  12. April 3, 2010 6:15 am

    Hmm… delicious would be a word for this poem! I love to surrender to a poem like this Carolee, meaning toss reason aside, take every nuance just as it is.

    And what an amazing range you have, remembering your other poems too (and especially my favorite! you know). Crispy on one side, and the other, like honey is!

    • April 3, 2010 6:57 pm

      neil, i like to play with mixing up what’s real and what’s not real — not just in terms of truth & fiction but in terms of what’s plausible in this life and what’s pure imagination. thanks for taking time out to read.

      and by the way, i used your favorite piece as the backbone of a chapbook i currently have out there trying to get published. 🙂

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