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napowrimo #9

April 9, 2010

It’s NaPoWriMo Day 9, and there’s one hell of a prompt up at Read Write Poem. It was written by Robert Peake, a blogger I’ve been reading for a long time. (He’s a poet with 1/2 the MFA I’d want if I went for one. Well, he has a full MFA from Pacific University, but it would be 1/2 for me because I want a bi-coastal MFA: Pacific University and Stonecoast, but you’ve heard that story before.)

Anyway, where were we? The prompt. It’s one of those multi-part deal-io’s, which are lots of fun. They can also be time-consuming, but the limitations of NaPoWriMo insist: give it a quick whirl and see what happens! My notes about how I used the prompt follow the piece.

..DRAFT /

REMOVED BY THE AUTHOR FOR REVISION.

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PROCESS NOTES: Robert provided 24 words (flap, winter, torch, pail, jug, strum, lever, massage, octopus, marionette, stow, pumice, rug, jam, limp, campfire, startle, wattle, bruise, chimney, tome, talon, fringe, walker); we had to use twelve (the ones I used are in italics). We had to include something that tasted terrible (poison) and a sound that makes us happy (harp). We also had to include part of a previous poem that didn’t work. I used this — “sirens/ in the city below. the trees/ clack their bones together/ afraid” — from a poem I drafted at “i am maureen” on 3/28 You will notice I was lazy and tacked it on at the end.

Tally: 10* = 5.5 RWP + 3.5 PAD + 1 Book of Kells.

*Target is now 31.

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8 Comments
  1. April 9, 2010 10:11 am

    Hi Carolee,

    You have some great ideas here. I love the first stanza and then the burning marionettes, mouths agape and maniacal flames, then making a harp from their strings. Good storyline!

  2. April 9, 2010 10:27 am

    I think you did great, with word choice and narrative.

    “Gather puppet strings,
    leftover ligaments.” Good Stuff

    Regards,
    Doug

  3. April 9, 2010 11:03 am

    I continue to look forward to your poems. Loved the line make excellent firewood. This reads like a dream narrative. Well done.

  4. April 9, 2010 1:03 pm

    This is clever, and funny – very sharp! The most shocking line – “They never stop smiling.” I’ll not forget that one.

  5. April 9, 2010 2:19 pm

    This is simply wonderful Carolee — I absolutely love, I mean love, the entire second stanzas, just super… 😉

    I wrote a second poem for today, day 9, staying precise to the prompt with this one — tough, but fun…
    …rob
    Image & Verse

  6. April 9, 2010 6:50 pm

    Carolee,
    Love this story! The second stanza is excellent!
    Pamela

  7. April 10, 2010 3:55 pm

    Oh wow! I couldn’t see how I could possibly use “marionettes” along with the other words, but “marionettes make excellent firewood” is brilliant!

  8. April 13, 2010 9:25 pm

    Love the marionettes-as-firewood bit. Gave me the chills.

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