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napowrimo #21

April 21, 2010

NaPoWriMo Day 21! Today’s draft is written to the Poetic Asides prompt: Write a poem with the title “According to ______.”

I had the pleasure of sitting outside on the patio at the coffee shop with Jill for a few hours midday. When we got to the writing portion of our day (it’s hard to know what the best portion is: the writing, the eating, the talking, the sunning), I did a free write on the title “According to the recipe.” Most of it was clichéd and overdone, so I haven’t included it in the draft of the poem. Though I hadn’t intended this to be a short poem, it’s all I have in me today. I’d like to develop it further (I think), but I suppose it could end where it does. At least today, for draft #1, it ends after seven lines.

..DRAFT /

REMOVED BY THE AUTHOR FOR REVISION.

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Tally: 23.0 = 7.0 RWP + 13.0 PAD + 3.0 Book of Kells. (Target is now 32.)

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12 Comments
  1. April 21, 2010 3:52 pm

    Actually, Carolee, I wouldn’t change a thing! It really hit a chord! Blessings on your day!

  2. Barb Harris permalink
    April 21, 2010 4:06 pm

    WOW oh Wow!!!

  3. April 21, 2010 4:11 pm

    Perfect. Don’t go messing with it now. 🙂

  4. April 21, 2010 4:51 pm

    I agree with the others – this is – dare we say – perfection!

  5. skankinmoon permalink
    April 21, 2010 5:40 pm

    Love the last 2 lines.

  6. April 21, 2010 7:18 pm

    This is wonderful and perfect Carolee.
    Pamela

  7. April 21, 2010 8:50 pm

    Despite you calling it a draft , I think the recipe has turned out perfect, Carolee. Nice work.

  8. April 21, 2010 9:43 pm

    well Carolee I dont think it is perfect….it is pretty close though…..but I really like it…so well written as usual….thanks for this Carollee

  9. J. D. Mackenzie permalink
    April 21, 2010 10:40 pm

    Like this a lot, so true that there is no perfect recipe for some things.

  10. April 21, 2010 10:53 pm

    enjoyed yr comments you shared…together chatting having fun… and the recipe of marriage… funny abt a recipe it never always changes tho the ingredients are the same… tonight’s tide

  11. April 21, 2010 10:54 pm

    This is a little ripper!

  12. April 23, 2010 9:38 am

    Powerful. I need to work more on keeping ours fresh and spicy.

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