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november poem-a-day, day 2

November 2, 2010

My temptation is to keep poking at this one (ending, for example after “afterlife”), but I finished it minutes ago at a soccer scrimmage, and I am resisting further tinkering. Real revision is a task for another day.

I watched an autopsy on television last night (I have no idea why), and it was still on my mind today. It provided the images for today’s draft for the Poetic Asides PAD Challenge. The prompt today was to write a “ready to start” or a “not ready/never ready” poem.

I combined the autopsy imagery with — no surprise! — relationship stuff. I was determined to go somewhere else this month with the poems, and I still hope I can, but this is what came out for today. Already, I am finding myself thinking about how these will or will not fit into a chapbook manuscript, but I know it’s too early. I just need to let them be and worry about that afterward.

REMOVED FOR EDITING.

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3 Comments
  1. November 2, 2010 8:43 pm

    “He won’t come to me anymore than you do.
    Farther along the road, where someone dumped trash,
    the twisted plastic claw of a rake reminds me
    of the half my rib cage you’ll win back
    in the divorce. Better to split myself up now,
    for all the world to see, than to let you.”

    Wow. Nice work. Keep going…I’m trying this, too – come on over and comment!

  2. November 3, 2010 1:31 am

    This reminds me that I once watched an autopsy for real – not on TV. It was a long time ago, I had almost forgotten.
    Like Donna, I found “The twisted plastic claw of a rake” a particularly striking image

  3. November 3, 2010 7:30 am

    Ditto the rake, but the CUTIE PIE surprised me the very most in the poem, as full of new imagery as it the entire poem is.

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