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a river of stones, stone #14

January 14, 2011
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for a river of stones.

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11 Comments
  1. January 14, 2011 9:50 am

    I visited this same idea of false cheer in a piece of short fiction I wrote yesterday, so your stone resonates with me.

    • January 14, 2011 2:00 pm

      oh, her cheer isn’t false. it is very sincere. that’s why i almost believe the morning could be good.

      • January 14, 2011 2:08 pm

        Interesting. Reading it again (okay, for the third time) I can see that. Maybe it was the residual thoughts from last nights writing that did it….

        Still, I enjoyed your stone quite a lot. All of them that I’ve read, as a matter of fact.

        • January 14, 2011 2:11 pm

          thanks for reading. i’m glad you’ve enjoyed them.

          i think we do get stuck so often with people going through the motions that we assume it sometimes. but this is genuine, and if i do anything with revising or using this in another piece, i will make sure to capture it better. 🙂

          • January 14, 2011 2:22 pm

            That’s the thing with these stones, the opening line in my piece of fiction was a stone from a couple of days ago. Somebody suggested it would work well as that, and I realized that he was spot on.

            I don’t know that you have to do anything to capture the moment better, it is probable that I need to work on not letting my filters get in the way of my reading.

  2. January 14, 2011 9:58 am

    a bit like the good Dr. Williams, shaking the loose stuff from a poet’s notebook —

  3. January 14, 2011 3:20 pm

    Love the promise of that free cup, and how you tie it in to the cashier’s friendliness.

  4. January 14, 2011 6:41 pm

    I love Ann Marie!!

  5. January 14, 2011 9:16 pm

    When they say “Good Morning!” I like to say, “Hadn’t noticed.”

  6. January 15, 2011 11:39 pm

    You’ve done a lot of good pieces — I liked the “dead man” one you did recently.

    My comment is not appropos of you “small stones” piece.

    Rather, I’d like to say, My gosh! Don’t pay $1.78 for coffee!

    At Stewart’s every day, I get a 20 oz “Flavor of the Day” — you have to tell the cashier it’s Flavor of the Day, and they will then take 50 cents off the price. They have great flavored creamers, too; I dig the caramel flavored one, no sweetener is then needed.

  7. January 16, 2011 8:10 am

    I got my 10th cup free earlier this week. That really does make a morning better. I like this stone.

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